Clara studied
her only daughter’s face.
Emma was lit
up from the inside, delicate features a dynamic
play of barely-contained emotion. It was like watching a still pool of pure, clear
water breaking into soft ripples of movement. Unconstrained and uncontainable.
Like the only thing keeping her together was her rose-tinted skin.
Her girl was
in love.
Clara’s eyes
turned to the young man seated at her daughter’s right. This stiff and
stalwart-looking individual with his mortician’s
hands and his thin, aesthetic face. Could her daughter – hers and Reggie’s – possibly
have made this colossal a . . . mistake?
She turned
toward the stage, where Reggie and his troupe were just finishing up their 9:00
set. What would her husband’s reaction be? Would he treat this proposed
addition to their little family with courtesy? Or, more probably, would he rear
back at the unintentioned insult and explode
in artistically unsuppressed emotion. Then drag what could have been their
future son-in-law out to the blacktop
and toss him into the first available taxi bound for Timbuktu?
She sighed
again as her daughter chattered endlessly, ceaselessly, enthusiastically on.
Should she say something? Try to turn this particular ship before it hit the great
reef looming before them? Should she interfere?
She tuned in
to what Emma was saying. “. . . and I was so excited when I met Alphonse.” She linked
hands with the sober young man beside her. “He loves jazz! Why he listens to it every day in the mortuary! He is exactly what Daddy told
me to look for in a husband!”
Clara put
out a hand and touched her daughter’s shoulder gently. “Oh, honey,” she said.
She glanced down at the musicians on the stage. Heard the smooth, perfect notes
of ‘Take Five’ pouring from Reggie’s Sax and sighed. Then she turned back to
her daughter. “Honey, what your father told you to bring home was a Jazz MUSICIAN!”
Every week, Delores of Under the Porch Light doles out a challenge.
Six words. Use them.
These are last week's words because I'm just that far behind.
insulted, blacktop, mortician, jazz, dynamic, interfere
Drop by and see what the others of her faithful band of misfits have come up with . . .
I loved this from the first paragraph of great writing - and it just kept getting better!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, Susan!
DeleteI'm so bummed that I forgot the line about the mortician listening to jazz in his mortuary! It doesn't make sense without it! Would you mind reading it again . . . ? :)
What a fun exercise!
ReplyDeleteThank you Carol! I love these!
DeleteThis is why I love reading your blog every day - great writing and great stories!
ReplyDeleteWell...maybe the mortician plays jazz...or at least likes it.
ReplyDeleteAargh! It wasn't until I read your comment that I realized I left out the line that talks about him listening to jazz in his mortuary. Sigh. Could you read it again?!
DeleteHEY!!!!!!!!!!!!!WHADAYAMEAN MISFITS??????? Did you really think I wasn't going to read that eventually?
ReplyDeleteUmm . . . oops again . . .?
DeleteHee hee! Jazz mortician! Someone needs an ear tune-up :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Jenny. I had forgotten a line and you're the first person to read it complete. Now it makes sense! :)
DeleteI love this exercise it looks so fun! Of course you have to have an amazing imagination like yours!
ReplyDeleteYou are so sweet, Rena! Thank you!
DeleteMusician-Mortician; they do sound similar.
ReplyDeleteStill, if Emma is happy with her jazz loving mortician perhaps Clara and Reggie can learn to like him too. and who knows? Maybe Alphonse keeps a secret saxophone in his office.
This is a lovely story.
There are definitely jazz roots there. And where there's a basis . . .
DeleteWow!!!! You nailed it!
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